Kalea Delgado Ms. Lehmann English 1-3 12 February 2019 The Miracle
It was a warm summer day in July of 2010. My aunt, Kaela, my cousin, JJ, and myself were at my grandma’s house. We were all eating ham sandwiches and potato chips on the front porch, taking in the warm sun. The bright, orange ball in the sky was shining down on us more than usual. For the first time in a while, the clouds weren’t covering the sun, and we could feel the warmth. “It’s a nice day outside, isn’t it?” asked JJ. “Yeah, it is really nice outside, and it’s not even windy like it usually is.” Kalea added. We continued eating our ham sandwiches and threw them away when we were done. After that, I walked over to the playground in the back yard and climbed up the ladder to the top of the playground. I placed my hands on the monkey bars and quickly took them off because the hot metal stung my sensitive hands. Instead, I just slid down the slide, being cautious because the slide was about as hot as the monkey bars were. “Kalea!”, Kaela yelled.
“What?”I screamed back.
“Do you want to come ride horses with me and JJ?”Kaela asked.
“Sure!”I exclaimed. I was very excited to ride my aunt’s new horse, Kyan. My aunt trained her horses to run barrels at the rodeo in Jerome. She was good at it, too. Kyan was a new horse that my aunt bought, and she was just in the middle of getting her trained. My aunt also had another horse named Charlie Brown. He was a good barrel and pole racer. We walked over to the horse trailer and got the saddles and the other supplies out of the storage closet that was connected to the side of the trailer. Kaela passed me the apple treats for the horses and asked, “Will you carry this?” As I grabbed the treats, I smiled and nodded my head. We walked over to the shed and put the halters on the horses. Once we got the halters on, we put a leading rope on so we could walk them over to the corral. JJ walked Kyan and Kaela walked Charlie Brown, while I walked in front with the apple treats. Once we got over to the corral, we brushed Kyan first. Next, we put the blue and red striped saddle pad on the horse. Then, we placed the saddle on the horse and tightened the straps underneath. Finally, we put a bridle on Kyan. Kaela handed the bridle to JJ. “Can you help me get on the horse?”, I asked. “Yeah,” said JJ. He lifted me up and placed me on the saddle. “Hold on,” said JJ. I grabbed onto the horn of the saddle and waited for Kaela to saddle up Charlie Brown. Suddenly, JJ screamed at the top of his lungs and let go of the bridle. Kyan stepped on JJ’s foot and she took off down the paved driveway with me on her back. I was terrified and didn’t know what to think at the time.I hung on for dear life. Kyan started running towards the road, but before she made it to the road,she sprung upwards and I fell off her back. Everybody began running over to me and JJ jumped on Kyan and put her back into the pen. My mom and dad drove over to my grandma’s house as fast as they could. I stayed laying on the ground, crying because it knocked the wind out of me. As soon as my parents got there, they took me to the E.R. My mom sat in the back of the car with me as we drove off to the hospital. I was very out of it and delirious. My dad was driving, and he was going faster than he probably should’ve been. At that moment, the only thing I could think of was “Will I be okay?” I was scared to death and didn’t know if I hurt myself. With all these thoughts running through my head, I didn’t realize that we were already there. My mom picked me up and carried me into the E.R. They got me back to the room as quickly as possible. They took x-rays and did tests to see if I had a concussion. It must’ve been a miracle because when the doctor came in to give us the results he said, “The x-rays show no fractures or breaks, and she has no concussion.” I was just as surprised as everybody else to find that nothing was wrong. I learned to always be careful and cautious around horses.
Narrative Reflection Questions
Answer all questions with complete, grammatically correct sentences. Be specific and thoroughly address each question.
List one thing you've learned from writing this paper that you can apply to other writing assignments. What will that look like? I learned how to write and format dialogue. In other papers this will look like better dialogue format and I won't get it marked wrong in other papers or essays.
Identify a specific revision you were asked to make and explain why (this can be at any stage of the writing process). How did you revise? What did you learn? In my narrative I was asked to make a new paragraph whenever a new person talks. The only thing I did to correct this was make a new paragraph. I learned that whenever a new person talks you must make a new paragraph.
What are the conventions of a narrative and how did you meet those in this assignment? The conventions are literary devices, dialogue, description, and using first person. I used a few literary devices such as simile or imagery. I also used quite a bit of dialogue and description. I also could use first person in my story and told it in my perspective.
Given more time to work on this assignment, how would you improve it? I would put more description in my paragraphs.
What is one thing you're proud of in this paper? I am proud of the description I did put in my paper.